Drop leaves Faucet
carefully –
slyly looking both ways
like a prisoner in a daring escape,
takes a breath
closes eyes,
Launches!
free falling bliss
to desperate reconsideration
wind pulls delicate skin
and all is quiet
Drop shatters into
a million shining sparks on a stainless steel
tundra,
Transforms into something infinitely soft.
Take one last look, Drop, at a cold grey world and
drain toward something
altogether new
written 4.23.13
how cool…. a single drop and such an adventure if we have eyes to see…very cool description jody..ha…love how it takes a breath and closes eyes before jumping..smiles
how cool…. a single drop and such an adventure if we have eyes to see…very cool description jody..ha…love how it takes a breath and closes eyes before jumping..smiles
I just BECAME that drop–while reading–and now I feel myself evaporating. But In my inner hydrogen, I am certain there is a heaven of wetness waiting for me above.
And it will send me back again…but where? Maybe this time as a salty tear in your eye, to help your cry.
Sorry! I just write what I'm thinkin' sometimes and I cannot stop the keys from clacking.
PEACE!
I just BECAME that drop–while reading–and now I feel myself evaporating. But In my inner hydrogen, I am certain there is a heaven of wetness waiting for me above.
And it will send me back again…but where? Maybe this time as a salty tear in your eye, to help your cry.
Sorry! I just write what I'm thinkin' sometimes and I cannot stop the keys from clacking.
PEACE!
This is lovely Jody! I like the use of texture and imagery that bring this to life. Well done!
This is lovely Jody! I like the use of texture and imagery that bring this to life. Well done!
very cool piece…love how it all starts with a drop and becomes so much more…and i like the allusions to its own trepedations at the drop…
very cool piece…love how it all starts with a drop and becomes so much more…and i like the allusions to its own trepedations at the drop…
Love that… maybe a “part 2” to this π
Love that… maybe a “part 2” to this π
Thank you all for your wonderful comments! Truly truly appreciate you taking the time to read π
Thank you all for your wonderful comments! Truly truly appreciate you taking the time to read π
“Stainless steel tundra” – awesomesauce.
Great imagery abounds through this – ace writing.
“Stainless steel tundra” – awesomesauce.
Great imagery abounds through this – ace writing.
..what a fascinating read… i liked in particular the last two stanzas… well done! smiles…
..what a fascinating read… i liked in particular the last two stanzas… well done! smiles…
I love the verbs – transforms, launches, shatters ~ That drop can turn into a river ~
I love the verbs – transforms, launches, shatters ~ That drop can turn into a river ~
Is your drop mindful she has options? Can she find a different wind to nudge her?
I wish your drop, a new, clings longer, endures for having found a better place.
Perhaps you will write of it if it comes to pass and in a way as eloquently as you have done here.
Cheers
Is your drop mindful she has options? Can she find a different wind to nudge her?
I wish your drop, a new, clings longer, endures for having found a better place.
Perhaps you will write of it if it comes to pass and in a way as eloquently as you have done here.
Cheers
I can't believe I missed all these beautiful comments – just silly busy at work. I really appeciate all of your kind words and the fact you took the time to read! Thank you thank you!!!
I can't believe I missed all these beautiful comments – just silly busy at work. I really appeciate all of your kind words and the fact you took the time to read! Thank you thank you!!!
ah Jeff… mindfulness ~ maybe, maybe π
ah Jeff… mindfulness ~ maybe, maybe π