bass player at The Horse You Came In On

Angelo playing inside
these filthy walls since ’90
no longer plays to the walls
but is the walls
is the smokeyceiling
theneonlights thehanging
plants
the thuddrumthuddrum
thuddrum comeon !

all us hangingvines
pour the cobblestones
drink seasons moldy classics
become bassline players like Angelo
slowly slowly over time, thuddrum
thuddrum comeon !

5 Comments

  1. Jody Costa says:

    revised “red journal” writing….

  2. Brian Miller says:

    nice…love the sounds and feel of this one…as i could have been right there listening to the bass line…smiles.

  3. Semaphore says:

    I like the way you let the words run-on to each other, an onomatopaeic rendering of what's happening inside the club, with snatches of music, conversation, all threading together into a wall of sound.

  4. Felt like I was right there, loved the sound effects spelled out.

  5. Jody Costa says:

    thanks all… had some fun with this one!

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