complex jazz notes

why does
the wood here smell
of urine
two dancers find their
own
rhythm while an old lady
walks out
with her dog
straining
to leave
all the while
the upright bass
competes violently
against
the trumpet
and the man on my side
says, with whiskey
breath,
i hate myself this
much.

10 thoughts on “complex jazz notes

  1. dang…tight rhyme throughout…makes for a wicked flow and you touch all the senses as well in a great little write…bringing air freshner next time though between the wood and the mans breathe…haha…his line there at the end though, oy…nice…

  2. dang…tight rhyme throughout…makes for a wicked flow and you touch all the senses as well in a great little write…bringing air freshner next time though between the wood and the mans breathe…haha…his line there at the end though, oy…nice…

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