complex jazz notes

why does
the wood here smell
of urine
two dancers find their
own
rhythm while an old lady
walks out
with her dog
straining
to leave
all the while
the upright bass
competes violently
against
the trumpet
and the man on my side
says, with whiskey
breath,
i hate myself this
much.

10 Comments

  1. Claudia says:

    there's much jazz in your poem and much real life in jazz…and there's much music in the ugly… very well captured…

  2. Claudia says:

    there's much jazz in your poem and much real life in jazz…and there's much music in the ugly… very well captured…

  3. Brian Miller says:

    dang…tight rhyme throughout…makes for a wicked flow and you touch all the senses as well in a great little write…bringing air freshner next time though between the wood and the mans breathe…haha…his line there at the end though, oy…nice…

  4. Brian Miller says:

    dang…tight rhyme throughout…makes for a wicked flow and you touch all the senses as well in a great little write…bringing air freshner next time though between the wood and the mans breathe…haha…his line there at the end though, oy…nice…

  5. Joseph Hesch says:

    I've been in this joint. Great images, Jody!

  6. Joseph Hesch says:

    I've been in this joint. Great images, Jody!

  7. Jody Costa says:

    aah thanks all. might be visiting the joint tonight 🙂

  8. Jody Costa says:

    aah thanks all. might be visiting the joint tonight 🙂

  9. Victoria says:

    You really created the ambiance of the place in this. I think the sense of smell brings it all home. Good one.

  10. Victoria says:

    You really created the ambiance of the place in this. I think the sense of smell brings it all home. Good one.

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